Something I'm working on I want to get your opinion on

[Legend of the Past]

So while working on my stories, I got what I think was the weirdest muse I've ever, EVER gotten. I've told a couple of my friends about it. One of them said that I'm potenetially psychotic. So yeah, tell me if it's TOO insane. It's a few theories, regarding the universe featured in 'Soun of the Enchanted', my story.

Theory Number 1: World\Universal Mass-The anchor to the world

Several billions of years prior to the events of Soun, God (named Kadush in my story... Again, kudos to all who know what the word's meaning in Hebrew) formed the universe. At first the world was a gathering of energy that filled an empty void. Later on he locked the energy in small units with a positive core (Atoms), and thus Mass was formed. In order to allow smaller things to exist with a more solid form, Kadush created a force called World or Universal Mass. World Mass is what one links one to the universe (In more complex terms, Dimension). A World Mass is permenent and cannot be changed. Living things, being capable to manipulate materials to form energy, have heavier World Mass then other objects.

Theory Number 2: The WoMLitch effect= When two become three...

As stated above, a World Mass is unchangable except for one way. When two World Masses collide, a struggle is formed. Such a struggle does necesarrily point towards aggression=Such a struggle could be a body being hit by massive energy (Deflection from explosions). When a struggle presists and a third World mass joins in the middle, the third World Mass becomes severed and is torn into two entities, both being the same matter. If it is a living thing, he will retain all memories and personality traits he had before the original was severed. The two halves are then sent in opposite energies, each of them being caught by one of the two conflicting World Masses. When the conflict ends with One WM 'losing', the World Mass is destroyed, and the copy of the original Third Mass is warped into a place that can only be described as 'A mistake'. The winning WM then loses grip of the third WM and returns to it's regular behavior. The third WM that remains then falls into a coma, due to mental damage caused by the severing. At times, one developes certain mental abilites during his comatose stage.
After awakening from the Coma, the WM goes about it's life as if the severing never happaned. It can be severed as well, and the effect can repeat itself to a single WM to infinity.

Theory Number 3- WoMLich Void, a space that doesn't exist

The place where WM that has interfered in a conflict is sent to is called WoMLich Void (World Mass Glitchvoid), and can be interpreted as a place that doesn't exist. It was not created as part of Kadush's grand design, formed only several thousands years after the universe was formed, and formed soley due the massive energies of many conflicts that went about unintened, which caused people to 'split into two'. Due to the increased nerval activity formed by WoMLich effect, it's been theorised that it might of had a hand in the evolution of the brain for many races in many worlds. Kadush is aware of WoMLich void, but seeing as he viewed badly of the Splitting effect, he reffers to WoMLich as a wastedump formed naturally, and hence does not interfere with it's existence.

WoMLich Void is a place where nothing remains consistent, as it's built of bits and pieces of real things that have lost form in the 'real' world. The laws of physics vary there, at times certain laws taking effect, at times others and at times none at all. The matter within it is also incostitant. Though much matter 'exists' inside WoMLich, only little of it is actually visible. At times, certain things disappear and other things appear. At times they simply disapper or simply appear. Due to wars being a major causer of WoMLich effects, many bits of cities are sent over to WoMLich. As such, it can be viewed as a sort of nonexistant 'dead' city. (No, it is NOT derived from the Dead Sea and\or the Tesseract. It's derived from something else, much more amusing. Ask me personally, if you're intrested).

Matter within WoMLich loses all of it's former 'real world' properties. Metals can transform immediatly into gas, then back into metals and then into another, totally non-metalic material.

WoMLich Void is home to non-living World Masses (Light World Masses).

Theory Number 4: WoMLich Entity - A thing that is everything and nothing

When Living World Masses are transported into WoMLich Void, they are found to be too heavy to be contained by that void. They are then condensed and added into an entity, called WoMLich entity (Full name: Heavy World Mass Glitch containment entity). WoMLich entity is NOT A LIVING BEING by at all. It does not have genetic material, does not have any organs and does not require to process materials for energy. Rather, every WM added into it supplies it with a massive amount of energy. It does not require oxygen, food or water to survive and is incapable of breeding.

It's often described as a 'Moving inconsistency'. Like WoMLich Void, it isn't consistent and certain parts of it may or may not appear at a given moment. The voices it makes, it's appearence, way of movement and even way of thought are incosistent (At times it is docile, at times aggresive, at times friendly). The rate in which he changes himself is unclear as well-perhaps even that is inconsistant. Wether is is sentient or not is unknown, or, if it is, what view does he have over it's role in WoMLich, that of a ruler, protector or part of the actual location.

WoMLich entity is home to living World Masses (Heavy World Masses).

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That's it... Opinions?

[Telephalsion]

If i knew what.

"Soun of the enchanted was" maybe I'd understand more, interesting reading though.

[Strayed Wanderer]

I've tried this before, it's called adding a scientific spin to pseudo-philosophy in order to create a story...

[Legend of the Past]

Soun of the Enchanted is my story.

Soun=Dream. Being of Russian origins gives you a new set of words and an high drunkened limit.

The Enchanted really means nothing, as I shun magic. Just added as a filler methinks, though a few of the characters are thought to be 'enchanted'.

I won't elaborate on it, but basically a story about God's remorse and hope, and the effects they have upon the universe. The thing in the first post, WoMLich (The effect, place and entity) takes place in the third story of the series, and take a major part of the stories that follow.

Though I don't see how that really matters. That's pretty much the entire damn beggining of the universe, no complex characters or unexplained terms.

EDIT: Nah... The story isn't very philosophical or 'pseudo-philosophical'. If I wanted to write philosphey, the story would be much different. Sure, some characters have their philosphical views (fate, coinsidence, etc). They're all proven wrong, though. This is a late addition to the story (Much of the plot was formulated before I thought of it), and I had science injected into it much before. This just expands upon the plot, ties into some characters, and allows certain characters to develop the way I want them to.

[HolsteinCow]

All you need is pschologists inventing fear and sex at the beginning of time, a galactic dictator bringing everyone to Hawaii and then nuking the hell out of it, and Tom Cruise.

You'll have a religion in no time, young L. Ron Hubbard.

[ReaperGal]

Hail Xenu.

[Teenr0cker]

Hail Vishnu

[Fitz Tayo]

Hail wanderer.

[Aegis]

I have three things to say:

1. It's very original, but I have no idea how this stuff is going to effect the story. Good job however.

2. Don't make the story too abstract and dreamlike. I don't know how to describe what I mean, really. Your story just seems like it could easily veer into the "thin layer of a normal story over wierd philosophy" territory that things like Final Fantasy: The Spirits Within occupy.

3. Alex Chiu would be very proud of your scientific observations of the universe.

[Greatchickenman]

Final Fantasy: The Spirits Within is considered philosophy by someone somwhere in the world?!

[Sarcasm]

Don't make the story too abstract and dreamlike. I don't know how to describe what I mean, really. Your story just seems like it could easily veer into the "thin layer of a normal story over wierd philosophy" territory that things like Final Fantasy: The Spirits Within occupy.

BWHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAH

[Aegis]

Alright, I fucked up. Admitted.